Making them look more like Vinyl
The gold disc looks good but the label section needs to be a bit bigger. Try to the label in proportion to a record so that the viewer can identify the object as a vinyl. A consistency of having equal centers would be appropriate. Most framed vinyl are displayed portrait and aren’t in A size. The rectangle appear to be a bit wider in width than a standard A3 piece of paper. Try to make it look like a record, you’ve already got “sections”, where each song is divided up.
The gold colour is fine because when people here this, they automatically think of “vinyls”. You are making a connection with how people display them in their homes in frames.
Quality of line and detail
Your project is about detail and quality of line. The inverted charcoal drawings look really strong pieces together. They are like piercing eyes looking right back at you. However, they don’t look so good when they are a full size. Not because the lines are badly drawn, but just, it looks like a lot more is going on when it’s been downsized.
How can you add more detail? A way would be to perhaps do a drawing that is really large and then to resize them to a smaller scale so you have something that’s maybe 12” but with twice the amount of detail in it. If it’s too big to scan you can do it in sections and piece it together, it doesn’t matter if it doesn’t fit perfectly together. A broken record is what William kentrdige did in his work.
Thematic’s and what are you trying to say?
Your practice is about vinyl. What is a vinyl? It is a piece of plastic with grooves that plays music. Your lines are like the grooves. And when you print them out on a piece of paper, it’s like pressing a vinyl. You’re methodology and ways of working is about what vinyl is.
The black and white charcoal inverted discs, they feel like something different to this. These instead feel like they are inspired by vinyl and have moved onto something a bit more abstract.
Have a think about, is your work inspired by vinyl or are you trying to say something about vinyl with it?
Ways forward with your project
You are producing work but you need to recognise what is good so you can make more of it. You are yet to make your best piece.
Maybe a way of presenting your work would be to frame them in different quantities. For example, the charcoal drawings look good as two. And the 3 that have different densities of line would go well as a sequence of 3.
Another experiment I could do is to layer a solid semi-opaque yellow colour down and then on top add another layer of writing and line and see how it would look ?
